Passed By

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Passed By" presents a clear and vivid depiction of admiration and longing. The comparison of the subject to various flowers, while highlighting her unique qualities, provides a rich, layered understanding of her character.

However, there are areas for improvement. The poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure and rhythm to enhance the reading experience. The repetition of "she does.." and "does not.." creates a monotonous rhythm that could be broken up for more impact.

Additionally, the metaphorical language, while effective in some areas, could be clarified. For instance, the line "The blossom does not reflect, and we do" is ambiguous. If the intention is to convey that unlike a blossom, the subject and the speaker engage in introspection or mutual understanding, it could be expressed more clearly.

Lastly, the ending "-she passes me by.." seems abrupt. The transition from the comparison to flowers "soon to pass by" to the subject passing the speaker by could be smoother. It might be more effective to build up to this revelation gradually, to give the reader a sense of the speaker's longing and the subject's indifference.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys a sense of admiration and unrequited love, but could benefit from clearer metaphors, varied sentence structure, and a smoother transition to the ending.

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the AI says. I think that the AI has it mostly right this time. The only thing I might add, is that you seem devoted to letting her know that you are there for her, and she for you. Nicely done, ~ Geez.
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