Paragon expections
Lay heavily
Gasps form
Sweet summer breeze
Caress the madness
White sheers flutter
A cradled paradise
Unperceivable
Legions history
Form the view
Scents grasped
To swallow the fever
Paradigm inhales each thought
Tangled reflections
Seep
Unbidden
Kiss of history
Smears reason
Laying unbendable
Soft greens unseen
Sounds mystery unheard
Life unbearable
Swimming toward the other side
Comments
Hi Ida
A strong emotive piece. Did you mean to do a poem for the workshop? The form of this one doesn't match any of the workshop options. Strong work nonetheless.
Ron
Ida
Have read this slowly a couple of times and it is very good, just a couple of things I have picked up in the reading:-
Paragon expections (Did you mean Expectations)
White sheers flutter ( Did you mean Sheets)
Scents grasped ( I am bad, I don't like scent, always go for Perfume)
Keep up this style, it is hard to write short lines and retain the message.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T