OUT OF THIS WORLD

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Out of this World [Feb. Contest]

Releasing horses of imagination,
I raced to worlds I dreamt of travelling to-
where stars are born of fire inflammation
to console the darkness, "I'm here for you."

Some young, some old, some anxious to be born
a galaxy furnished the milky way.
In timeless laps and amazing flown,
the elegant content shaped up my day.

The fairies took me aboard the cloud,
a ride along where planets run,
Just like a baby I cried out aloud,
"that really was a miraculous fun."

Now descending from the alien's cocoon,
I promised to come back sooner than soon.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Not an easy subject for someone who didn't put a pen on a paper for more than a year now. I tried out my favorite form " the sonnet". I might have failed to get a good volta, but I am happy I could participate with my friends and enter something for Feb. Contest. Thanks to Raj.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Dear Rula

This is a winner no matter what, it is exciting, and has a great flow with a story in there.
Good luck though you wont need it for the competition,
Yours as always Ian..xx

Dear Ian

Many thanks for your kind words. I'm happy you like it. Hope all is well.
Highly appreciate your visit.

Hi Rula

A good come back poem. A little too late for the February Contest but I am sure imust have helped you get the rust off your poetic tools.. Thanks for posting it....

Regards...

Ooops

dear Raj
Believe me, I've just known it's Mar.
I think the judges forgot to conclude the contest so I was able to enter my poem though time is over.
What really counts is the participation, doesn't it?
I really can't thank you enough. Highly appreciate it.

Yes. Participation counts.

Yes. Participation counts. Stan the good man had reminded that contest closes on 25th Feb

Best wishes for the next contest..

I must

be more connected to things at Neo. If only I have tme.
Thank you again!
Regards