Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse
a curse
Loved has made all forget
what was poetry and verse
and
the best critique we all know,
will my cruci-fixation rehearse
ere that happens,
guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...
I must thank thee
if you want to see
the bard survive in me...
May 17, 2012
Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wow loved
one that really shares your particular genius here
great language use
just one thing
'the bestest critique we all know' - - 'bestest' to 'best' - the first is not a word :)
great word visual here with the hyphen loved
'will my cruci-fixation rehearse'
i really like
'guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...'
love judy
xxxx
Thanks Judy
I have like Shakespeare always did
created three new words
by now you know which
Best -test ..... a hyphen maybe could be added
cruci-fixation not really crucifixation
and archaicity..like being ancient
Thanks for your contribution
I adore you Judy
yes
i liked the other two coinages
but 'bestest' to me just conjures others' use in speech that is bad english
a hyphen would fix that
xxx
i love you too loved
thanks shall replace as best
no hyphenation here