Poet famous I desire
ducks and fish fly through the air
where we all breath effluents
dink donkey platypus
but except the other or
space is lacking room
please don't eat my ear
catharsis trembles cowardice
catch the hook and bait the fish
not nor neither
wife beater lover even spinach
crap becomes treasure
Treasure becomes blood
Ordered randomness
in rows unlined
leading me forward
to the beginning
popcorn, hard tar and wild onions
The meat of things are bones
inedible yet gourmet praised
while the starving become yellow
and cracks of reality are crazed
Damn! I can't help my self
no matter how I strive
writing is not meant for some shelf
it's meant for those alive
screw the abstract
Comments
you are on the losing side of the argument
and should consider Pounds famous poem about Whitman. After despising Whitman he matures and finds that there is poetry in Whitman, and ends "let there be commerce between us."
As I mentioned in a different post, you can be Minniver Cheevy, but in the end the world does change.
There is a very serious literary philosophy and criticism in the 20th century about the major poets of that century which have changed poetry, as Mozart would change Scarlatti or Monet would change Courbet. The 20th century poets whom the vast majority of your peers acknowledge as masters those who expressed their times and created new forms of modern expression. They are not in your court. I don't think anyone on this site is on your court. But we still enjoy your poems.
How is it we can enjoy your poem and this poem, for different reasons. Like what you get out of Bach, and what you get out of Mahler...or charlie Parker.
I personally do not prefer "abstract poetry", if here is no clear narrative to engage me. The poem you are referring to is not abstract. It plays with words in a fresh way to describe the perpetual continuum of our lives. I would consider doing a course, modern poetry 101, and you never know, you might find commerce with it. The worst thing that can happen is...you don't.
Greetings
Do the workshop and I'll likely participate. I'm open to new forms of poetry but that "poem" you refer to is not poetry it's just a collection of words as is the poem I just posted here. I appreciate your honest opinion and thanks for the visit. PS it's my opinion that the referred to thing was actually written by the poet to see just how gullible people are.
Couldn't have said it...
better myself! I think I have done a poem just for the very same reason. Not sure of where it is or the title, but I've felt the same many times. ~ Gee.
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Hi geeze
I once posted a poem here a long time ago before the site crash. I had become weary of nothing but praise on every poem I posted including those I knew needed help so I posted "Dead Dog Poem" a badly written poem about and unpleasant subject ( a dead dog on the side of the road). Appreciate your dropping by and hope you are doing well
Of course
I was referring to your poetry in general and ee cummings poem not this poem which is rather obvious the point you want to make by the 3rd line...
lol
sometimes obvious is good
love this
love this
HOW?
Can anybody love THIS? I hope what you love is the sarcasm in it..........stan
Stan
i guess this poem was your way to see if it receives the appreciation the sample poem to find syntax errors was put up by Kelsey...lol...
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Hi Raj
BINGO!!!
Yes, the sarcasm. :)
Yes, the sarcasm. :)