victor dyck
Oct 27, 2022

OCEAN OF HUMANITY

IN A BIG CITY,, IT IS LIKE AN OCEAN, ITS HARDER TO SEE AND PERCEIVE THINGS TOO CLEARLY, LIKE WETHER YOU ARE HANDSOME' OR BEAUTIFULL.
PERSPECTIVES CHANGE RAPIDLY PEOPLE LOOK DIFFERENT' LIKE A FOGGY DAY
MORE LIKE FISH CLEAR DAYS' MORE GEOMETRIC PERFECT' LIKE NOSES.
SOMEONE ONCE SAID TO ME INA CAFE CAN YOU SEE YOUR FACE TO ME THAT WOULD
BE MOSTLY IMPOSSIBLE.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I HOPE PEOPLE FEEL PERCEIVE THIS ALLTHOUGH IT COULD BE WRONG

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Massachusetts middlesex

Favorite Poets: shelly pope shakespeare dryden robert frost ee cummings t

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