obviously

not everything in reality is obvious so many hidden people plants animals
insects things not directly in your vision birds insects in bushes
in a big city people sitting or walking in corners or a car blocks the vision
of two people kissing or walking reading a book

About This Poem

Last Few Words: i hope you can sense perceive this world

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Massachusetts middlesex

Favorite Poets: shelly pope shakespeare dryden robert frost ee cummings t

Comments

Dear Victor

Nice to meet you, i really liked this one, it has elements that touch on the profound if you sit and read it over and over and over as I did. I am an old member and I've not been around for a while, so I am just reading and enjoying the poetry tonight. Thanks so much for sharing this one.

I expect as i settle back in I will endeavour to provide much more comprehensive feedback.

Kindest Regards

Seren