I wish you knew
That you madem e
Shed crystal droplets
From my russet
Silent mirors
Mademy words
Bleed everlastingly
And extinguished
My etemal flame
Just within
A moment's grace
Amidst I never envisioned
That you would do
Such astonishing thing
So I still can't believe
That you really did do that
It's not your reflection
It's not you soul
Jun 14, 2024
Not you
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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