Candlewitch
Candlewitch
May 23, 2022
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No Matter What! (poem of the week contest)

No Matter What!

his youth was
still upon him,
although he knew it not.

when things
got a bit rough
he drew a hit of pot.

it didn't
make him wiser
confusing him instead

sitting
at the drawing table
when he should have gone to bed

not considering
any different, he knew he was right
refusing to reconsider other choices

he locked out
reason pounding in his ears
hearing only their exaggerated voices.

righteous indignation,
was his sword and shield
they held him through the night,

he knew he could win
his passion moved him on
he lost the battle, but he would win this fight

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

The title is a bit long, but your rhyming is pretty good.
I like the tercet form and think that I should do it
every now and then. I don't think that you need the extra [ed]
on shield. Pretty good theme. ~ Geez.
.

One

One

2 years 11 months ago

as Gee said, good rhyming scheme, also it doesn't feel forced.

All the eddy pieces feel like another chapter of his book...talking of which when is Styx III coming out? I want a whole shelf of STYX books!

regards

One.

Candlewitch

thank you for reading and responding...I got the idea from a friend who's daughter and son-in-law who were quarreling.

*love, Sis