Nigeria

I think you have it all right here. A good work that delivers a message and does it with aplomb.
The only criticism I have, is the spelling of the word [precious]. I'm not the best critic of free-verse poetry, but even I can see that this one is good. Welcome to Neopoet and if you need help with anything, just ask and I'm sure that someone will help you with whatever questions or problems you may have. ~ Geezer.
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Glad to see a passionate poem about pride, nationhood, and idealism. Good poem! The feeling jumps off the page.

I agree with the above. A composer writes within the rules of music so it can be played, so is grammar the rules for poet. He can consciously play with the grammar but has control of that and it becomes part of the rhetoric of the poem, which is not the case here.
MY take: End the poem with "Yes!" Boom boom boom and the double entendres don't work, nor is
"precious fatherland" . Fatherland is for me too European, used most often by Germany Yours might better be "motherland".

and invited them to Neopoet, and this is exactly what I was hoping for- raw truthful poetry.
You will change us.

nice poem i enjoy reading your poem, it give me hope for unity
just like my poem "lets unite despite our difference"
nice one