I spent the 2nd being broken
Stuffing down words
that could barely be spoken
The 1st was gone
Celebrations skewed
Promised shifted
Resolutions renewed
Is this the hype
We all look forward to?
I spent the 2nd being broken
Stuffing down words
that could barely be spoken
The 1st was gone
Celebrations skewed
Promised shifted
Resolutions renewed
Is this the hype
We all look forward to?
Last Few Words: Feeling a little blue these past weeks. This is what came out for me.
Review Request Direction:
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
peggdit
In my opinion I think if you used words rather than numbers
first , second it would give your work a more polished look