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I dream of the wonderland there
but when I am no more here
I slip the beauty of life
I leave here
hoping for something more
beyond the horizon of existence
when we are no more
but in a supercilious hope
we live to hopefully return
to relay heaven’s lovelier
than one here can say
but
who will you voice your feelings
to a body since released to eternity
no one will be here to listen
my friendly ones to thee
just believe me
I have been beyond the beyond
and returned
as my body had not been burned
my heart started thumping again
all ‘twas not in vain
my body totally intact did remain
so I know
what is life
here and there
sad
nowhere
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Comments
Always a pleasure to read
"I dreamed of wonderland there,"
You really hear tare in language anymore. I like balance, considering my lack of it in mental terms. Excellent brevity words here paint a very fascinating series of images. Always a pleasure to read good free verse poetry. Now, if you invested that introspect into your comments on other people's work you'd be the most popular poet
"A splash of hope designed here you got great potential,"
you are on the pathway to greatness it all appeals to the senses but much more in its flame.
Mario Thanks so very muchly
I a pseudo poet Free-verser
only few like my comments
I have tried so many times
my flavor of a red rose
doesn't fall into any one's design
But
thanks to you
shall myself realign
one more time
endorsed by such a treasure
Ever so often in life you come across one exquisite piece that lightens your way
Through fancy brevity it's enhance with a touch of magical amiance to help read
Yesterday we can learn by are mistake let in flight for one to really breath in
This piece is loaded with positive messages of hope long to cope with reading in
We stand elect through solemn foot endorsed by such a treasure
thank u so much
Mario