Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
May 09, 2023

Nature's Kind

There's blessing in this bracing breeze
that breathes on me with breath divine.
It bends the branches of the trees,
but fills, with joy, this heart of mine.

Beside this carefree gentle stream
I watch the lonely clouds float by.
They're wistful, like an angel’s dream,
or poet's sentimental sigh.

There's comfort in this place of peace,
far from the noise of mortal men.
The sylvan sublime sounds don’t cease
to captivate the poet’s pen.

The singing birds tell me it's true:
beneath this dome all Nature's kind.
On hill and vale, by lakes sky blue
there's healing for a poet's mind!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: the healing of a poet's mind

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About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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neopoet

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Overall, "Nature's Kind" is a pleasant and peaceful poem that captures the beauty and tranquility of nature. The imagery of the bracing breeze and the gentle stream creates a serene atmosphere that is further enhanced by the poet's appreciation of the natural world.

The use of rhyming couplets throughout the poem adds a musical quality to the verses, which reinforces the theme of harmony with nature. Additionally, the poet's use of personification, such as the wistful clouds and the singing birds, creates a sense of connection between the speaker and the natural environment.

One suggested line edit would be to change "don't" in the third stanza to "doesn't" to maintain consistent verb tense.

Overall, "Nature's Kind" is a well-crafted poem that reminds us of the restorative power of nature and the importance of taking time to appreciate its beauty.

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Lavender

Perfection - meter, rhythm, rhyme. So extremely elegant. Not sure what AI meant by changing tense regarding "don't" and "doesn't" - that would not only be incorrect, but it would mess up the meter, too. Perhaps place "sublime" before sylvan sounds? Dunno.
Stunning.
L

Blue-eyed Bolla

Many thanks, I took you advice concerning, "Perhaps place "sublime" before sylvan sounds?" It now reads much better, thank you.

Geezer

I was thinking that you might use, [do not] cease. Otherwise, a great piece! Well done! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Great everything here. Alliterative as all heck and great vocabulary usage. I missed your way with words and I especially enjoyed this particular poem.

Tim

Ruby Lord

A masterpiece in aliteration. Deliverd beautifully, I enjoyed reading your piece and it gave me the sense of comfort I think you aimed to deliver. Great poem, I am very envious of your talent, Ruby :)

Tigger Kaz

Beautiful poem.
Nature truly takes us away from the hustle and bustle. I really felt the serenity of your words.
Wonderful

Blue-eyed Bolla

Many thanks, Tigger. Having penned this, I suddenly realised just how unkind Nature can be sometimes. Must have been a lovely day. Again, thanks for stopping by.