Rula

May 08, 2016

This poem is part of the contest:

Love poems

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My Only Published Poem (March Contest)

My friends wonder why
I don't often write
a poem about you;

"maybe she's not aware
of the Mother's day!"

"or maybe she doesn't care,"
they'd simply say.

They didn't know then
that you're the only
published poem I've
ever had
mother.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Very clever,

Very clever write. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe!

Thank you for the supporting words. Much appreciated.

happy mothers day Rula

do read my BLOG message for u

Thank you Lovedly

for your kind wishes

Is the P

in title purposely

Thank you

Hawk eye :)

and they say

cataract I have
I said no ops please
let me go blind if so be it writ

LORD BYRON
returns in me

Wow Rula!

Wow Rula!
the closing lines are so vivid and strong..."you are the only published poem I have ever had mother"..these lines keep ringing in my ears long after the read...

Dear Raj

À wow, coming from you, is absolutely highly appreciated.
Thank you!

All because the poem deserved

All because the poem deserved a wow Rula. Pretty out of the box way of writing this one...

Regards,

An excellent example

of free verse, something I wish I was better at. It is also brimming with love and pathos. It shows consummate skill the way you keep the winding up of the main point to very last word. Alone, the first and third verse make up a poem but the middle verse is a masterful inclusion.