January 2023 Challenge New Year's Resolution

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My new year's Resolution

I won't remain the same,
I won't endure the pain,
I won't beg for friendship,
Free to leave or to stay,
I won't send out my emotions,
I will build them a place,
Somewhere beyond the seven oceans,
Far away from people's gaze.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria, NGA

Comments

hello,

this is very nice...I like the simplistic approach you have taken!

*hugs, Cat

Thank you I am grateful

Excellent

The rhythm and pacing are great. I liked the theme and I think there is a clear thought conveyed here with a definite beginning and end. I really like the ideas about sitting with your feelings instead of reacting and letting them control you. I like the part about not begging for friendship, that’s personal for me at this stage in my life. I’m learning to let things come in their time. This is a really motivating poem.

Tim