Geezer
Geezer
Jul 25, 2022

The Murder in Sixth Street Alley...

Sitting in my unlit window
in the dark, I watch the alley
Sweaty and yet chilled
from the scene before me
I watch the struggle and see
the gleam of a knife flashing
Once, twice, a third time
and with a muffled, gurgling sound
an indistinct form falls
limp against the dumpster
I give a start, my chair squeaks...
the murderer stares in my direction.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is a round-robin for 5 members here on Neo. it is an experiment to see how well a thing like this will go. If it goes well, there will be more and others will be invited to join and make their own. The rules are: 1] Each member will follow an order of appearance. 2] They will follow the story-line 3] they will be allowed 12 lines, [no more] 4] when the last person has had their turn, the story will be concluded and hopefully in a manner appreciated by all. 5] Each person will be allowed to start their own story at the end of each story. [They may decide if Free-verse or rhyme]. 6] this experiment will take a couple of weeks. We would appreciate the comments and critique of anyone on the site and may make adjustments accordingly.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Candlewitch

I didn't realize I was holding my breath until I reached the end. the story line is thrilling! I can't wait to see what comes next! this would make a good murder mystery! will you autograph my copy?

*hugs, Cat

Obadiah Grey

Oh, You Tantalus You!
Must admit to a Bated breath moment,
A, yeah, yeah, yeah,,,,,,,,,,

Oh, fuckin' 'ell moment.

Hope it goes well. Obi.

Geezer

so glad that this seems to be intriquing to all that have responded so far. It bodes well for the experiment! Thank you for your enthusiastic response. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Can't wait to see where this goes! I'm on the edge of my seat
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Geezer

I'm glad that it is so well recieved, I really hope that it goes well and we can continue this on a regular basis. I'm sure that you all will keep this going in an equally good fashion. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

does Tim need to be alerted to the fact that he is up next?

*hugs, Cat