Sometimes, I pick up the phone
and then it hits me
you won't be there on the other end
I'm tempted to dial anyway
Maybe I'll hear your message and your voice
But Paulette told me she turned it off
she can't bear to hear it ring
So, I'll have to keep your voice in my memory
Many people call themselves "Brother"
but they do it because it's cool
"Brother from another mother"
We never had to say that
"My Brother" meant something to us
We shared our lives for fifty years
married sisters, and divorced on the same day
We danced and clapped each other on the back
But we were hurting, and leaned on each other
We both found new love
We shared those experiences too
We moved away, but never lost each other
Because we had the story in our hearts
I knew that someday, one of us would be alone
You weren't going to last forever
and I was not so great either
Now I can cry, if this was paper
it would be too soggy to read
Through the ether, maybe you will get to see it
Love you always, Brother...
Comments
Too much grief in today’s world
Not nearly enough joy.
Liked this piece, the subject took an unexpected turn (to me).
My only suggestion:
Change last stanza a bit
Now I can cry, if this was paper
It would be too soggy to read
through the ether, maybe you will get to see it
Love you always Brother...
Thanks Ray...
I do think it reads better, this way. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Mark...
I really didn't care so much about if it was poetry or not, I just had to let it out. ~ Geez.
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Your opinion...
is always listened to and I never dismiss it out of hand. ~ Geez.
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Hi Geez
This reminded me of my closest friend who went to the other side a couple years ago. I have no recommendations for change and if I had a vote you would win
Thank you...
It makes me feel better to know that someone else knows how I feel, but sad to know that someone else knows how I feel. ~ Geez.
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Staggeringly good and clever
Staggeringly good and clever piece,
Remote rhyme, Well metered. (and more importantly, meaty)
Cheers, Obi.
Thank you...
Glad you like it. When I write about personal things, I try to keep it like something that the reader can imagining happening or has happened to them. It doesn't need to be dressed up or sanitized, just real. ~ Geez.
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