while
everyone
on earth
was burning,
and yearning
for a mundane affair,
a crescent was born
it peaked above us all
with a spiritual call
asking
everyone
to heal
May 17, 2018
A Message From The Moon
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Dear friend Rula
one more example of your innovation and creativity. I liked both the form and substance of the verses creating a crescent smile of the moon.
Well done artist Rula...
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Hello Raj
I thought of this as the newly born crescent of this month brought the holy month of Ramadan which brings so many blessings for the Muslims who fast this month. Saying that, I preferred to keep it general as each moon is so special and always holds an aloof message while shining through the darkness.
Thanks for your supportive kind words friend.
a good way to express a holy
a good way to express a holy sentiment.
on a lighter note I would tell you not to fast on poems....:)
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Thank you raj
I'll try not to :)
Thank you again.
Thank you Mark
It does take a lot of time especially that it's the first shape poetry for me,however, I thought it's worth it to express the mood of such a month.
Dear Rula, Ramadan Kareem
Dear Rula, Ramadan Kareem
a very encouraging message, and a very meaningful shape poem.
Thank you
kindest friend.
Highly appreciate your passing by and the wishes.
Rula
artistic, surrealistic and universalistic. Well designed and well expressed.
Hello O.Rhyku
and lots of thanks for reading and commenting.
nice concrete poem!
I never understood why a poem in a shape is called that...
I have troubles doing anything like this on the site- indentions, italics...how were you able to paste this up? I cannot find the means in the formatting section.
I think she has done this
I think she may have done this using space bar...just a wild guess
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Hello Mark
I'm trying to find you a very rich blog by Kelsey (swamp witch) on how to do it. It needs more than just one step.
Just found
this link should help
Please don't hesitate to ask if you need any further help
https://www.neopoet.com/swamp-witch/blog/sat-2014-03-22-2100
Rula
you always beat me
so I only admire thee
some time ago
I also composed
a crescently poetry
but it always lined up
along the side lines of neo's
and let the crescent go
now I also know
how about it to go
Thank you
Loved. I'm happy to know that you like it.
and
I always bow to Ladies Rula
and ur
one
wonderful!
wonderful!
Greg
Thank you
Hi Rula
Posting form poetry can be a real challenge. I know this is supposed to be a crescent as well as what the shape stands for. That all being said it would come across better if the shape was a bit smoother.......stan
Hello Stan
I of course understand your point. I tried my best for a smoother shape, but the site advanced formatting wouldn't help much to show shapes. I however have done some minor edits as recommended by you and wonder if the shape now looks any better.
Always appreciate your time and thoughts.
Be well.
Rula
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work
as us
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th a lot
of wor
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into
it
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Take care, Yours as always Ian. x
Hello Rula
It's lovely to read you and definately a fan of concrete poetry, haven't done one like this for an age.
I cannot add anynore its all been said before me
Well done !!
Kind regards J x
My pleasure
dear Jayne. Thank you for your kind words.
Always appreciated.