You were pretty young
now as age catches up
time is still a constant
but we change so much
our time varies with our breathing
kissing was then a new thing
now its just a routine
Time seems to weigh heavy
we had no computers
only typewriters
and
mostly we wrote poems
using our pencils
time appeared to be lesser
ha what a guess
then kisses were quicker
and faster
now we have slowed down
like the Nile
do you know its speed
the lake is still still
as it was times since
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dear lovedly,
we do start out with (seemingly) a lot of time on our hands. we are completely oblivious that our time on this Earth has a limit. it is nice to be young, for those of us who are young...it ain't me! we waste a lot of time on things that don't really matter and won't matter in the end. in middle age, we spend in denial, unwilling to face old age is coming. that should be when we do the things on our bucket list. old age gets here before we know it, and have done few things on our list. somethings are impossible to do by now due to body replacements such as knees or shoulders. we just don't walk as fast. or bend as deep ect. in our old age, we realize we should have done certain things when we were younger.
I really like your poem because it made me think real hard. I liked these lines:
You were pretty young
now as age catches up
time is still a constant
but we change so much
it is a great poem, my friend!
*hugs, Cat
Time weighs heavy...
Yes, it does. You are right, we don't pay much mind to the passage of time because we don't understand that our time here on earth infinite. I wish that you had made more about: "kissing was then a new thing
. now it's just a routine"
it seems that many people, when they get older, just give little pecks or blow kisses at each other. I make it a point to give my wife five little kisses every night before I go to bed, always five! Sometimes, I get my little kisses early and I go back for five more. She will playfully say; "You already had your kisses" but I persist, and I get more! A little game and the romance still is there. Even though we are older now, and time weighs heavy on us, "we remember when". Thank you for bringing that back to me. ~ Geez.
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Gee and Cats
I'm so happy you both agree each couple is different old age is sans most things As Shakespeare hath already outlined But we can still make aging sublime ere time
One of your best, IMO
The reflective nature of this is very well done!
A suggestion, couple the first line with the first line of the next real stanza, then a line break for stanza two. Would make a bit of form for this piece. This is very William Carlos Williams-like.
William Carlos Williams- WHO
Ray all these days I've been waiting for you
why you were so silent
I had no clue
But now
I thank you
yu are a wonder of
Neo