Lonnie
Jan 29, 2015

Maelstrom

Maelstrom

Transcendental soldiers riding
steeds of mindless steel
clad in trappings suitable for war
patriotic slogans hiding
what they really feel
knowing they have done it all before

shades of souls that never rest
burn them like a flame
and spur them on to deeds they’ll never tell
each of them within his breast
concealing bitter shame
for helping stoke the fire pits of Hell

blood runs red as minions die
performing in a play
directed by political decree
theirs is not to reason why
but only to obey
fighting for the honor to be free

free to breathe polluted air
free to pay their tithe
free to live in cities full of crime
free to subsidize the lair
of those who wield the scythe
and reap the profits of a people’s time

let the steel steeds turn to rust
let the trappings fall
let ghosts of soldiers past no longer thrive
living life is more than just
and giving it is all
one really needs to fully be alive

C. Lon R. Bruso

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

Rula

Rula

10 years 2 months ago

I am speechless. This is so powerful. You needn't me tell you so Lonnie, I'm sure you already know, but I wanted to say hello and thanks for such a post.

L

Having been through such as this it becomes easier to write about the consequences! Thanks for the feedback!

emogothgirl

this one hits hard. very nice.

oh and, by the way, may I post this to the blog?

Mag

L

Yes, you may use it, as long as I get a small amount of credit for writing it! LOL!! Thanks for the read and the comment!