Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Feb 26, 2023

Lovebird

My true love is a nightingale,
shy singer in a shady lee,
or gorgeous bird of paradise:
that rainbow-colored symphony.

Sometimes she is a turtle dove,
a gentle bird, naive, unwise.
At night, bodacious bird of prey
that swoops, like death, from savage skies.

At times she is a wee wan wren:
a frail and fragile feathered thing.
Some days she soars like eagle bold
on most majestic, mighty wing.

I love her when she simply sings:
like skylark on a dreary day!
But mostly when she swoops like swift
in summer's breathless, brief ballet.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

I love everything about this. Every. Thing. This one I want to read again and again. There are subtle shifts in rhythm that come and go like the different songbirds. Really excellent job with this one.

Tim

Geezer

you must be an avid bird-watcher! I really enjoy the words used to describe the different birds and the mood created. There is an economy of words, but it says so much. ~ Geezer.
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