liquid courage

The thing that breaks down my walls without having to say a thing

my face turns from snow to fire when my darkest secrets become my spoken desires

feelings hidden now become know, secrets spilled that I should've never been told

things locked deep inside escape and light up the night like a million little fireflies

I wish I could capture them all, but now they're out for the world to see

callin it courage is misleading, when in reality it is de filtering

About This Poem

Last Few Words: something i just while feeling regret

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: WA, USA

Comments

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supposing that the meaning of your title is one of [alcohol loosens my tongue?] I know some that I would never tell a secret or give private information to, because a few drinks of alcohol and their brain leaks out from their mouth. They also don't have enough self-control to keep from saying whatever is on their mind, regardless of what the consequences might be. I would normally say that the use of stanzas is preferable, but this poem is really too short for that, the use of double spacing is sufficient. I got the gist of the poem, even if I got the cause of the title wrong. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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