Like this.

This.
And that you love me.
Even just that you are.

That you see softness and then it is.
That you lay down and I sleep.
That you are happy and so, I am.

You are.
And that you love me.
Like this.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

Region, Country: Vancouver BC, CAN

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

I think this poem is unique. I like the language. I do feel that is unfinished. Perhaps this work has something more to say..?

Shyanne

I don't feel the ring of truth in this poem.

There is some depth missing. Only you can tell us what it is.