At the light of the moon (March Contest)

its the voice of the speaker that strikes me most, lovely poem

A nice poem, but definitely not a quatern. You can get the form and the details under March Contest.
Just thought I should tell you.

I endorse Rula's comment..going a step further..to make it easier for you, I am copying and pasting below the guidelines / rules for a poem to qualify as a Quatern...hope it helps you in editing your nice poem to qualify it for the Contest...i would love for you to get it right..
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A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, the third line of stanza three, and the fourth line of stanza four.

A quatern has eight syllables per line.It does not have to be Iambic or follow
a set rhyme scheme.

line 1
line2
line3
line 4

line 1
line2 (line1)
line 3
line 4

line 1
line 2
line 3 (line 1)
line 4

line 1
line2
line 3
line 4 (line1)

Example :
True Love, Redefined

One day she hopes true love to find,
One soul, one mind, two hearts entwined;
Somewhere out there's the perfect guy,
For Youth has set her standards high.

He must be rich, handsome, refined,
One day she hopes true love to find,
Yet no one seems to measure up
And disappointment fills her cup.

The years go by, her nights grow long,
Her aging voice sings sorrow's song,
One day she hopes true love to find,
Her definition's redefined;

Simply a plain and faithful friend
To see her to life's journey's end;
For though her face with age be lined
One day she hopes true love to find.
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Best wishes and regards,

let's talk about you running a workshop. That was a very organized explanation even if the information came from somewhere else. We all research the subject of an upcoming workshop. For example I'm spending a fair amount of time studying the Ballade for a future workshop. I'm studying its history, the forms and how they have changed and its relationship to the ballad.
In other words, just what you did. I'll also wager that copying and pasting the information gave you the chance to read it again.

The best way to learn something is to teach it.

Think about it.

You should use this as your refrain.

Well I'm late enough getting here that I get to see the corrected product lol. I like the poem but you need to check stanza 3 line 1.Either sights are or sight is. Best of luck in contest........stan

Over the caribbean, flying fish - 10 syllables

She checked off cruise on her list - 7 syllables

Yet her dream did come true - 6 syllables

The Virgin Islands her blues are few - 9 syllables

Her sights is on another adventure - 10 syllables ( and you need to change 'is' to 'are' - grammar)

Hawaii a glorious venture - 9 syllables

The light of the moon, a dreamer's list - 9 syllables

a lovely poem - good luck in the contest
love judy
xxx

it almost seems to me that our poems are opposites! i like that. aside from your syllable count in some spots, this is a nice quatern. good job.

Mag

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One suggestion - verse 4 stanza 1 'checkmark' - needs an 's'
a really good quatern - congratulatons

xxx

love this one too. Can't say much about the quatrain 'cos I'm not well verse in it myself.

Alid