lovedly
lovedly
Jul 14, 2022

Life Worth Living Let's Fade Into You

Life Worth Living Let's Fade Into You
Life is given not for the asking ....
it's given by couples
on the beaches basking

as time moves on to a newer lifestyle
we may belong to sans all around

let's fade within each other too
now who
knows life belongs to woe.

some are firm
they will return

I ask em when ....
the sea is blue
does it not profile
a different hue

that is different
all remain silent

when the time comes
neither I can wait nor you

so till then enjoy life's view
from far and anew

life shall fade away
for me and you
no new hue
nor view

just silently fade away
we too
okay two
you and me sans everything
now hear me
for the last time
I need a silent kiss
fresh as new
let's
fade now
'tis due

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Bittersweet sentiment. Every rose has thorns after all.

“just silently fade away
we too
okay two
you and me sans everything
now hear me
for the last time
I need a silent kiss
fresh as new
let's
fade now
'tis due“

Really interesting. The time is NOW. The future isn’t in the bank.

Beautiful poem,
Tim

Geezer

Just her and I
I would prefer to keep it that way
We have to keep each other new
Because sooner or later, it comes due. Nice work lovedly. ~ Geez.
.

L

I like this! I had to read through a couple of times to get what you were saying and I like the way you have used "sans" as a noun, so the line, translated, reads, "We may belong to without all around". This is the kind of wordplay ee cummings was so fond of, since, "without" can also mean that which is outside of oneself or one's domicile.

lovedly

You are making me feel I am ee cummings ...at least his apparition
I also use without about
as about a periphery and hope ee cummings is turning in his grave
unless he was converted into ashes
SANS all is what Shakespeare would say
he alone so far has said it
I traced
thankx

L

Ah, so although you were original in how you used it, the bard preceded you! It must be gratifying to find yourself in such illustrious company!

lovedly

didn't notice it
someone says I compose like
Shakespeare
anther says e e cummings
yet to day just some one added....
Emily Dickinson
how many more said like this or that
but Ray do you know
I read none but Shakes'''''
now more of you ...shorter ones mainly