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Sep 06, 2011

LAST SUMMER WALK

The autumn winds will soon bring frost
foretelling colder air to come
so before the last of warmth is lost
we'll pick the last sweet summer plum

Let's walk the woods and pull on vines
shaking loose from the high canopy
purple juicy muscadines
from which we'll make some wine, maybe

Now, while worn leaves still are green
with poplars, only, showing gold
while doves and humming birds still preen
and buck antlers are growing bold

It won't be long 'till time of coats
and ice covers the old fence wire
when all that's green is winter oats
driving us to warm before hearth's fire

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

N

i read the poem a few times and then a few more. i like the setting and time. all together brings happiness. the wine making was great. it also gave a feeling of lose but still held the blance hope too.

S

Better to write of birds than to get the bird lol. Thank you Eph.............stan

S

I had best be able to do it with words as all I can paint is walls lol...........stan