weirdelf

Jan 10, 2012

Killing by meter

I will kill especially you
Kill you, Kill you, Kill you, Kill you, Kill you,
death by Iambic Pentameter

I will definitely kill you
Kill you, Kill you, Kill you, Kill you, Kill you,
death by Trochaic Pentameter

I will kill you right now
Kill you now, Kill you now, Kill you now, Kill you now,
death by Anapestic Tetrameter

I will definitely kill you, now
Kill you now, Kill you now, Kill you now, Kill you now,
death by Dactylic Tetrameter

Any way I think you're dead
I play a beat upon your head
death by irregular front stress
and Iambic tetrameter,
what a bloody mess.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just a teaser for the meter workshop, but I like it [grins]. Do note the different feeling of the different meters for the same words.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics

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Comments

You...

You really studied poetry in school. I need a lot of learning now. By the way, I'm watching a scene in a disgusting movie right now, in which an older women is thrashing the young girl who slept with her husband.

Just wanted to say so.

you can get all the learning you need now

the only "schoolish" bit is learning the names of the types of meter, and hey, you just learned them by reading this poem.

Alright, you've redeemed yourself in my eyes.

The poem is not only a marvelous tool, it's amusing. Now, as to your fascist comments... can you sense the voodoo doll? wesley

oh, I thought it was arthritis, angina and advanced syphilus

all striking at once! Put the doll away please! You know I was being purposely provocative to start a discussion, why the hell would I run a workshop on meter if I didn't truly believe in its value?

Redemption is hard to do, can't you buy it on Ebay?

Of course I did.

And it got me off my dead ass. wesley

Dear Jess,

From this example (and poem) I have learned that I relate to "death by Iambic Pentameter" and eddy styx best relates to: "Trochaic Pentameter". Now I just need to be able to pronounce them and spell them! And this gave me a hearty chuckle!

Any way I think you're dead
I play a beat upon your head
death by irregular front stress
and Iambic tetrameter,
what a bloody mess.

always, Cat

Bugger pronunciation

just remember the terms, they are essential.

Alex liked it too, but unlike Eddie, he can't write for shit.

I'm really glad you can feel the difference in the forms, you are more than half way to learning meter.

Jess,

I wrote a meter shit, that should be dead I guess
murdering bastards.
see further down, my answer to this meter,
Eddie
this is some crazy ass shit. I do think I like it.

Hello

I'm gonna save this. As an aside the meter is all over the place and that's My forte lol.........stan

sing along

I'm Jess the mess
diddle diddle diddle dum
with the extra stress
diddle diddle diddle dum
no matter how hard I try to scan
I always end an also ran
I'm Jess the mess
diddle diddle diddle dum

clearest example i've read,

clearest example i've read, of the correct stresses
THANK YOU
(copied and pasted in my meter file!)

the laugh at the last stanza was a bonus

cheers
p

This meter thing

seems to be killing my old ways
making me feel I haven't started
to write, I see meter measuring
so i take a ruler along with pen
to make the edges run straight
till there is nothing more to write
this meter thing is killing softly
but for my faith in reincarnation
I would have deemed it doomed
so I hope to write better pieces
Thank you Jess, for killing me