after years
of being together
sometimes you the pot
sometimes me the wheel
our love
baked
like choice
ceramics
held liquid
and soft love
and hot boiling chemistry
cooling to taste
with each of our lips
blowing
I did not expect
for us
to be dropped
upon the floor
a million jagged pieces
now my heart
is a kaleidoscope
of broken clay
and I think yours, too
(and some of our pieces
have made it into
each other’s pile)
the world turns
the sun climbs the sky
and sometimes
this pain
sometime this loss
sometimes this hope
creates
complex
colorful images
spinning
of what once was
of what will be
Comments
Hi Greg
Hi Greg
I must say you have chosen a potter's wheel as a metaphor and elements that go with it for building a relationship [ceramic]..thereafter I think you need to tweak it a bit to show how brittle it was ..thereafter the end of gathering the shattered pieces to build images of what it could have been is also good...in my opinion if you build on the mid section it would become a great piece...
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