I move
As the wind
I seek you there
A place
We both know
For us to share.
Hold me
As you dream
I will be there..
I move
As the wind
I seek you there
A place
We both know
For us to share.
Hold me
As you dream
I will be there..
Last Few Words: Love this way of writing..
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Thank you for your lovely poem
I like it.
May i suggest to try to add more content, perhaps some images that would define the place a little more?
The poems feels like wanders of a ghost in love.
Is it a breeze or a stormy overwhelming gale?
Very good comment. I feel we
Very good comment. I feel we are on the same page.
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