She was like the caterpillar
a silent warrior
fighting her way through her cocoon
a battle she must win
as she alone must walk on this path of self love
she alone must fight for the change that will define her very existence
she alone must become the butterfly that she was meant to be
Nov 03, 2017
The journey of self love
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Is this a piece of introversion, sewie?
It doesn't apply to everyone.
I should know, i'm not everyone.
Battles are for losers, as Mr Hitler and his like confirm.
Pathetic monsters.
Do it without words
and with a smile
and everyone's happy
running this mile
that'll all be over in a minute
or three
and you'll know not
what there's to be.
caio.
Gunnar.
very nice begining
keep going. see where this will lead you. Express the inexpressible in this transformation. Share your imagination of the vision of this event. These lines are beautiful....Keep Going!!
Thank you
Thank you