January 2013: Fire NSW

hot wind
rattles branches

bone dry tree

the artery of fire
cracks and bleeds

it is so beautiful, it is so terrible

ash falls, wood snow,
bone dry tree

About This Poem

Last Few Words: For those of you, here today in NSW, this is one of those scary days:a tinderbox waiting for a lightening strike, some idiot with a match, maybe just a piece of glass in the bush catching the sun- and suddenly the trees are on fire and the bush blazes, it snows ash. It is so beautiful and so terrible. Lives are changed, and people run.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: nsw, australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Too many influences

Comments

Jenifer

We are there with you all, sending out our love, and thoughts that you all will be safe.
Your write was very good and didn't waste a word, well written.
Yours as always Ian.T and Friends

Thank you, sweet man.

Thank you, sweet man. Tomorrow will be a fierce day, hopefully all will be well.

Smacks for me

I only just realised you come from NSW !! where abouts do you live ? I live on the mid north coast a little city called Taree I am sure you've heard of it ...

its a great poem as Ian said not a word out of place

excellent work much better than my poor attempt

Brava

soooo nice to have another aussie in the fold :) !!

hugs JC xxx

Dear JC, please never, ever,

Dear JC, please never, ever, ever, ever down your poetry - this is about us all sharing and learning and being in this wonderful forum. Your comments and your poetry are just lovely, your warmth and talent shines. We all write differently, that is all. I write bare bones, you write from your heart.
I'm down in Nowra - and of course I have heard of Taree. how exciting - maybe we will even meet up! Hope so. XXX

Dear Jenifer

I only say it as I see it lol its ok I've just had a bad week here's hoping it improves
I think your a wonderful poet you really have that something I'm going to love watching
You grow this is a good place if you want to better your work

Would love to meet up sometime not many poets around where I come from lol

Hugs n love ~