It's all blessings

when it rejoices
the sky brightens the drear hearts
with blessings and cheerful smiles

even when it cries
it showers the thirsty earth,
sometimes it rains frogs

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Two Haikus about rain .Do they work?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Comments

Rula

Lovely to see you in the Haiku mood, though it is sometimes hard to keep the syllables count on line but the opinion is that western writers can have a little leeway with this,
I think that one of these would be a good addition to the Renga I have started for the UK but you are so very welcome to join us here,
My thoughts as always, Yours Ian.T

Hi Ian

thanks for your input and your thoughts. I intended 5-7-5 haikus but seems I missed the count in that line. It is not that I don't like yours but always prefer to know what is that wrong in my language usage , grammar ...etc. That helps me better.
Please I have edited and made sure that the syllable count is right and would like to hear again what you think of the edit.

Rula

Your Haiku is top line and my bit was only a suggestion, your edit is perfect.
It is hard for us with our accents to write these things, they have always given the western world a bit of space and the syllable count is wavered a little.
Another facet that you have perfected,
Yours with many good thoughts, Ian.T

Ian

Always appreciate your thoughts . Thanks for the visits.