loved
loved
Sep 18, 2013

INTERVENTION

To err is human
to lead is but natural
to fight and win
is a desire
of all normal

only the brave bold and beautiful
differ,

they want to be always a leader
and
hate intervention
as we all dislike to be deferred
and
so we fight from the higher planes we exist
our position hope no one alters
nor us does desist

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

More from this author

Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 7 months ago

You started with a cliche the words were OK after that, then you missed the opportunity to use an old word like " doth " at the end, you slippeth young Bard we are waiting for the sun to light a new great piece or two..
Yours Ian.T

does desist

loved

loved

11 years 7 months ago

to err is human ...how doth thou sayest

thou Ian
and thy where dostith cometh from another poetrys version
thou sleeepest like in tempest...Ian
As I return from a worldly sojourn
was absent for a week
none notestist it
not even thou
none will misseth us at all
that I doth vow!

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 7 months ago

Did miss your presence LOL, Yours Ian.T

Welcome back..

mand

mand

11 years 7 months ago

guess we all want to do things our own way. Intervention is not always welcomed.

Interesting and thought provoking!

Love Mand xxxx