where is God?
then you will feel no necessity
of expressing such a desire
as within each one
burns a fire
of remorse
some time or the other
of anguish
as we live never together
in a modern world
flowing passed a violent current
of permanence
which we call
Impermanence
all things must change
as only impermanence remains
May 27, 2013
of impermanence
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Loved
Could you sort out the start of this one as it is a little bitty, you start with:-
do read my poem,
where is God..
Then you go into a reasonably good write, so I is confused !!!! (a bit)
Reference to something else at the start of a write means nothing it just seemed a bit disjointed, Yours Ian.T
kay
shall soonest