If You So Wish!

I am contemplating
Leaving,
Shall soon,
If you wish too
So I’d leave behind memories
For a while,
Till the ashes from heaven
Bury all my smiles,
Till then lest
I say good bye,
Stay alongside me
For a small while

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

however

i did not mean that kind of going

but from the world of poetry

as its now become so boring
so help me!

hello

contemplate all you want as long as that is as far as it goes...............stan

Just a slight thought... that's about all.... where will

the darkness
take my footsteps
there is no light
beyond my life's stairs
but wait
albeit!

Loved!

Good piece, good convincing sentiments... all that threw me off was the OLD ENGLISH "ere I go"and "wee while". There is sort of lost credibility and lost resonance for me - knowing that that is not how you really speak...
Otherwise - great concept. Almost wanted to beg you to stay!
Boni