RobinRosier
RobinRosier
Oct 31, 2017

If You Ever Change your Love

She felt next to a sizzling death.
Was this the good Godly earth.
If you ever change the petals mind.
He looked at her changing face so
kind right form formalized.
Like a change love needed
Her heart pleaded with red hues
Another plant beloved seeded

Set her mind free butterflies
A village greener lies?
Like colors of meringue pie
The men looked dapper with their
"Starbucks Tie"
A brighter Vue one specific clue
Did she pay her dues
Like an Owl how it hoots.
It's her again in her boots.
Like a lady needs to obey.
Adam and eve fruits on her tray.
If you ever change your love
Like a stray lost animal
The good earth plenty of minerals
He wanted so much to be loved
A big change of hands
Well suited hands met mine all gloved.
If you ever change your love
Sometimes a change is good to be loved

"Editorial Write"
"Historical Website"
"Pictorial Aphrodite"

That positive change from a good book page
But God! I smell the flowers they talk to me "Sage"
What will be coming my way
I need security the Kings speech of humanity
Today was not the day. I need to pray.
If you ever change your love
I hope you stay I won't have it any other way.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe

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Comments

Barbara Writes

I think the title is unique and well fit your theme. The rhythm in the tempo is slows down a bit.
For example these lines “The one thing he wanted to change
her fur the in the spur of her change
He was allergic different range
Where there's a will”.
Your formatting is untraditional for Poetry style as far as stanzas go with all that said, I liked it.

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RobinRosier

I am really happy to hear that you liked it. I am unique in my writing very different than the usual stanza or other people that write poems. My poems were in books and also St Jude kids they put my Kid poem in their news.I am not an English major and also I graduated Highschool I didn't pursue to go to College.So it will only make me stronger and understand more concepts in my writing.