Before being sandwiched
in every day's mundane chores,
those frivolous issues, and some more,
I come to read you,
I smile.
Dec 21, 2014
I Want You To Know
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
Good one but needs more..push the accelerator and continue to drive...you know what i mean?
Regards,
Raj
I know what you mean, you might be right, but sometimes it comes to you like this. Just a thought and you like it as is , no more no less. May be I should have posted it rather as a blog. But I appreciate your thoughts and the visit.
Thank you.
well
i think it's perfect. it made ME smile :) nice little write.
mag
if I could draw a smile
On someone's face every morning, then my mission is accomplished :)
Thank you for your visit and the comment.
If I asked you to change it,
would you?
Sir
Would never like to go against whatever suggested for improvement, especially when it comes from my dear mentor, but I don't have anything to add to this little piece.
It is how it is intended. If I have got your question right sir.
I love brevity, captured moments
like this and Al's recent 'Small Stories'.
I did not understand the line
I come to read you,
could you clarify?
jess
Thank you. I am happy you like it.
I think Mand's comment said it all
Hi Rula
I'd go with Jess on this one. :). + it's a nice gesture to someone special!
Love to you
Mand xxxx
Mand
I think you got me there. :)
Thank you dear for your clever comment. (((Winks)))
and that's a white lie
its been ages
at me
since you smiled
Loved
You can never guess.
gracious gestures
are not lost
fortuitous tidings
spelled to an ear of
the soul
bring blossoms
than you!
Thank you Steve
Not sure how I missed your comment