I Remember, I Remember

I remember , I remember
the place where I was born,
the essence of the holy heaven
embraced to bless my home.
The darker nights there ripened to
a brighter rainbow days,
to paint upon the worn out walls
a candy- polished glaze.

I remember , I remember
how then I hung around
the Arabian Oud’s smoldering
with the best scents around;
so glorious was the essence then
and lingers e'er after,
maintaining happy memories
and a much delicious laughter.

I remember, I remember
that peace had nestled where
I lived, not long before the wars
had filled with death the air.
No roses in the wild grow now;
just grass and some windflowers
are watered there with martyrs' blood
which now and then form showers.

I remember, I remember
the dreams I drew with wings.
I used to think they’d all come true
and blossom as does Spring.
That showed my childhood’s ignorance,
and now they are a burl;
it's harder to recall them than
when I was just a girl.

Inspired by Thomas Hood's "I remember, I remember"
Here, please enjoy
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems-and-poets/poems/detail/44387

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Excellent,

Excellent, really beautiful and sad, true emotion from your great poetry. Love Roscoe...

Rosco

thank you. This is a compliment that I really appreciate.

Rula

Beautifully written and a lot of nostalgia gained from memories sharpness..
Take care young Lady and look after you,
Yours Ian..x

Thank you

dear Ian for your supporting words. Highly appreciate your kind visit.

Beautiful. Jx

Thank you

dear Jane.

Hi Rula

This has a special feel about it...touching, and graceful

may I suggest one thing...2nd stanza, 4th line "where the best scents are found"
or "where the best scents abound"
to avoid "around" being repeated so close together.
I'm sure there are other ways to do it, just thought I'd bring it to your attention.

I'm sure you will find a way to work it out...or leave as it is (I'm not THAT fussy)

just me,

Al

Many thanks for your lovely words.
I have to say I didn't like the repetition either but I need to think about the alternative. Your suggestions are under study for the soonest .
Appreciate it highly.