I Like, I Don't Like...
by: eddy styx
I like dark moon, cloudy skies,
no stars to light my way.
the darker the better
at the dying of the day.
I don't like sunshine
splashing over the land,
where people lie on the beach
on towels on the sand.
I like shadows
where I can be hidden,
watching the careless
the foolish come unbidden.
I don't like loves first blush,
seeping under the skin
as a game of chance,
you just can't win.
I like darkened paths
as much as gloomy trails.
with my blade, I like to silence
her screams and wails.
I don't like cautious women
they put me off my game,
it's hard to strike
(if they know my proper name.)
Comments
I like this much...
The language use is good, [not a bunch of tongue twisters] and plain words to explain.
The rhythm is fast, and the theme is of a ruthless predator and well done. The beginning and ends are totally
what you would expect from eddy and his game. Great stuff!
~ Geez.
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thanks Geez,
wow...I take that critique as getting straight A's in school! I appreciate your work here. when are we going to read a poem from "the boys"? looking forward to it!
ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat
The Boys...
have been bugging me about that! It seems that Killer and Sir Gee both have something to say, and of course Anubis has a tail to tell. ~ Geez.
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hello Geezer,
that is good to know! sometimes I get impatient with the 1 poem every 24 hours rule but I understand why it must be that way.
*hugs, Cat
I love this
The dark undertones and murderous thoughts combined with a bit of romanticism in Eddie's thoughts. He is methodical and driven. A pleasure to read.
dear Rose,
I thank you profusely for your intelligent observations!
ever, eddy styx
It was my pleasure
Thank you for such a great read