jzarmel
Feb 03, 2013

I am

Unscathed by decisions made
Knowing no one will relate
How I behave is the effect
Subliminal silence
Tattoos. Artistic dialect
Chemical vibrance
As I place pieces of my soul
Into poems untold
Hidden behind what I reap
I've sown an impression of deep
Darkness

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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J

I agree with Beau, but I can feel/like the remoteness in your poetry voice,. There is a raw kick here as well - an internal defense mechanism to protect yourself, maybe? Sounds rebellious and hurt. Take care of yourself. And I agree about darkness - dark can be a great place to visit - a place of imagination and solace.