.
'sweet dreams', she purrs
I roll over and tremble
thoughts of losing her
.
even in unveiled sadness
her beauty incites tears
I cry twice
.
bearing now this
loneliness 10,000 days
an old man in love
Dec 02, 2010
How lovely She Awaits - 3 Haiku suite
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
I thought so...
Very good. I was just a little disappointed in the last one, because the first two lines, seemed as though they could not exist without each other. Just my opinion, ~ Gee
Very nicely woven, isn't it
Very nicely woven, isn't it strange how a succession of work actually belongs together? I love when that happens.
~A