The old year ended
so glad to see it leave
the new year extended
this was too much to believe
Looking ahead
my only relief
scattered and dead
like an old fall leaf
nothing there but a tunnel of light
how to get through
this was my plight
hope will surely ring loud and true
Comments
short and sweet
you will need time
to get here your treat
happy Jan
your maiden contest
all the best
lovedly
Thank You
A couple of...
points. A typo, [too] much to believe. Do leaves shatter? I rather think that it should be [tattered].
~ Gee.
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gee
no not a typo if I used too that would indicate also. So using to is correct No leaves scatter lol thanks for pointing that out
Chrys
Yeah
I think Too would be correct as it can also connote more than needed. But otherwise a succinct poem for the new year........stan
all
consulted with a retired English teacher and as such have changed it too
thanks agin for your input
so............
did you change it also or too much? just being a smart ass or at least half of one lol
Its not it's
...in the title. Apostrophes are so simple to understand.
If you insist on omitting punctuation (what a total cliché that is, btw), then you should surely drop all capital letters too. Consistency.
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Its not it's
O dear. People like you just won't accept corrections.
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May I point you to your comment?
Earlier this year, you wrote (I quote verbatim) "when reviewing a poem please keep in mind the little list that ask for intensity sensitive subject raw truth and follow the request also thank someone when they critique your work as they took the time to read and suggest. You do not have to use their suggestions as written in stone but be good enough to acknowledge the time given to read and critique"
I haven't spotted your "thank you" note yet. Naturally, you are totally free to leave in bad grammar. That is your prerogative. But, according to your own writing, you should say thank you.
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