Abstract words and abstract poetry

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Hologram [ Abstract Words, Abstract Poetry WS]

I was drawing lines and time lines
moving ziz zag, connecting points
some dotted, disappearing from sight
returning in a parabolic flight
some ran parallel
others angular
acute, obtuse, perpendicular

no pencil, no paper
no ruler, no eraser
just an unruly behavior

I paused. looked back,
mystified at the collage
I panned it, scanned it
flashed my eyelids
click, double click, flash
before I knew
the lens crashed
blotting out all lines
of the hologram

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

hello raj

Another nice attempt to abstract word/world. For me this reads more like scientific-fictional poetry.
I therefore, with my literary background admit that it's beyond my comprehension, but the mysterious touch there together with the title make me want to dig deeper.

A good title BTW.
PS. did you want 'zigzag' in your last line?

Thanks Rula for indulging in

Thanks Rula for indulging in decoding this attempt.. I will wait just in case more happen to visit this page and share their perception, before I share what I have attempted here..thanks also for comment on the title...good to know you liked it..

Regards,