Victorclaude

Nov 07, 2010

her hands

of finest stuff
of nature, her hands
are wrought --
to shine
the world a brighter
globe
set amidst the stars --

her hands do sing
and dance in mortal
air -- but have transparency
that is eternal

their loveliness -- their
beauty --
their slender elegance
I wish gracefully to
hold in mine --

and feel a moment of
eternity they possess
without effort.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I wrote this one for my friend Kelly, who's hands are beautiful beyond belief.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

Favorite Poets: Wallace Stevens

Comments

"Ive always said i wish a man

"Ive always said i wish a man would write a poem for me ... unfortunately not to be"

Don't be so certain -- watch your mailbox.

Thanks for the read and kind comment.

Love you,

Victor

Shirley,

Kelly saw it first, and she liked it very much with a bit of blushing thrown in.

Thanks for the read and the accolades!

Love,

Victor

god and goddess-like in its beauty,

Ah the CHI of life expressed by
the movement of hands,
their gracefulness,
made both by man and woman,
is god and goddess-like in its beauty,
each flourish creates a stir in the air,
swirls of this go out and reach the stars,
and you have seen their hidden beauty
here in your poem and your friend Victor,
in your dance of words,
those clumsy shapes
and yet when written by the human hand,
guiding an ink loaded pen,
they dance too
expressing more than we can fathom here
from lawful scripts.

Very nice Victorclaude with love from Ann

Nordic,

Margaret Ann,

I have no idea what CHI means, so that part went right over my head. All the rest I understood very well, and I thank you very much!!

Ciao,

Victor

Rosina,

Thank you very much, indeed~! I told Kelly once that if she went to the United Nations and let everyone see her hands their very beauty would cause world peace. I may not be far from wrong, but she has never done it.

Ciao,

Victor

Lonnie,

If you liked this, you should see the hands for which this was written. You would be on your knees in adoration; I was.

Ciao,

Victor

HI Victor

i think that it is a very beautiful poem , and i enjoyed it a lot , the only thing that i would say is that the first stanza would read a littlle more smoothly if you removed 'of ' from the first line.,
.

lou

Lou,

I am pleased that you enjoyed this one.

Thank you.

Ciao,

Victor

Just thought provoking here

Hello Victor
I have to share how I felt on this one plesee allow me. You know who I thought of here and it is Jayne Chloe her hands her words her transparency. I just had to say that.

I love the feeling I got from this write and I always felt if a poem moves me then I need to express to the writer how and why and so goes. There is much softness and serenity in this write of yours today and the ending was wonderful

Bravo and thank you

Mona Magics
xoxoxo

Mona,

I thank you very much. I wrote Jayne her own poem. This one is for someone else, as stated above.

I am pleased that you enjoyed this piece.

Ciao,

Victor