captjack
Aug 30, 2012

He Dares Her

Holding close against her cheek.
he tempts, taunts, teases, tries, her fickle nature.
He dares her catch him at his flirting glance,
capture him within the fullness of her smile,
contain him motionless within her grasp.
She lets herself be used but never tamed.
So back and forth for hours play he and she their game,
the sailor and his mistress wind.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: NW Georgia (Fairmount) by way of South and North FLA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 7 months ago

Playing with the wind are we?? Beautifully written and packed in many hours of play, some of which could be termed as plain sailing but others as wooing.
Loved it, Yours Ian.T

C

Hi Ian.T,
Thanks for the read and comments. I had fun writing this one. I'm glad you liked it.
CJ