red tailed hawk
suspended
suddenly
swoops setting sun
~~~~~
one legged,
heron meditates
gulps
river moon
rising
May 28, 2011
haikuesque #22 & #23
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Hope folks join with me in adding to the images with their own haikuesque poems.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Very good, Rosina, see how
Very good, Rosina, see how relying on instincts works?
However, I didn't know rats chase birds, see even I can learn some things. ;-)
~A
Out of my scope
I am the first to confess illiteracy of the haiku forms, nevertheless having read a great many in other online forums I have come to enjoy them. I will, of course, never write them myself, but it is marvelous to see how with but a few words a moment is arrived at and then like a Russell painting seeing the VERY next moment subtly inferred. These are delightful. wesley
Oooooooh. I love *delightful
Oooooooh. I love *delightful*. Thanks for reading, but never dismiss your potential. If you enjoy them, you see them in forming in your mind's eye, see the movement..and the next moment... well, you're due for some haiku, just waiting to be *snowed*.
;-)
snowing
haiku
and wesley too
(I looked at your profile to see if I could use any info listed, but since there is none,
this'll have to do.)
Anna
Two monkeys
high in tree
as the moon
dives into sea
here's mine, but in protest
575 haiku, is what I was taught, but this is just so much fun so fuck domestication and rules my friend.
Eddie
monkeys in a tree
monkeys in a tree
i see, hear them speak these three
I must be crazy
;-)
~A
Just having fun as you
Just having fun as you invited dear Anna:-
Shadow on the hill
fright below
dive through space
************
Bent neck
keen eye aware
sharp splash
poised grey morning shadow
motionless quiet
gulped a fish
Statue grey waits
immobile still
until the waters stir
to the kill
lank leggy bird
you wait in grey
your gullet swollen
suddenly.
Oh just having fun,
I know you love the heron,
I do too. Love to you from Ann,
Have beensome days in Copenhagen just now.