KINGZOMBIE
KINGZOMBIE
Mar 12, 2011

"This Grave that I Walk Upon"

I stand upon this unmarked grave,
hollow, mindless, numb,
I've been here far too long.
My skin, dry, cracked, and rotted,
all my memories gone.

A shadow of myself that's been lead astray,
I miss the peace of where I use to lay.
This hunger will not stop it does not pass,
this curse I pray will not last.
What have I done, why did I wake,
what was my sin, what rule did I break.

I walk upon this unmarked grave,
it is my soul that I could not save.
It is my grave that I walk upon,
in this world that I was from.

Now I'm destined to walk alone,
upon this grave that I call home.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Favorite Poets: I have many favorite poets but I like Poe the most.I would also feel wrong if I didn't include music to this also

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Comments

KINGZOMBIE

Your comment means a lot to me, I'm glad you liked it:-)

KINGZOMBIE

I will look over your suggestions, Ive been very busy lately.I'm glad you liked it:-)

M

I would like to bookmark this and come back to it for a proper critique okay?

Blessings to you and the family this Sunday

Mona Magics
xoxo

KINGZOMBIE

I'm glad that you found this thought provoking.I think you are the first person to ever get good bumps from something Ive written.Thanks for liking my brand of darkside Shirl:-)

Candlewitch

This poem is mournfully haunting. And you are so good at it, too! My favorite lines are:

A shadow of myself thats been lead astray,
I miss the peace of where I use to lay.
This hunger will not stop it does not pass,
this curse I pray will not last.
What have I done, why did I wake,
what was my sin, what rule did I break.

just one minor flaw, thats should be that's

always, Cat

M

You know I read this and it is just okay for me .. I don't know something it's either long winded or off meter in places. I think I need to do some work on it, if you don't mind to be able to give it my honest review. I have to come back again okay but please pm me if I forget less you don't want me to and leave it as is. I like the depth of it but something I can't get the jive with. lol

I have been ill so try to do it on the morrow perhaps.

Mona