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Jul 31, 2011

GRATEST SHOW ON EARTH

Watch the clowns as they all gambol
skipping, tripping, falling down
cartwheeling without preamble
it's the greatest show in town

The ringleader riding wild asses
elephant trainers strive for control
all seen by fools in rosy glasses
in the marble tent upon the knoll

Let's cheer at the circus show
we'll all stand to make more room
while the three rings down below
distract us from our country's doom

* response to the so called leaders in Congress

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

S

I'll check out cartwheeling with Webster. I think I'll change to semi-colon on other line. Thanks for eagle eye...........stan

weirdelf

Because it grates on your nerves? Or greatest?

If you could use allusion or some other device to be more specific about how they are bringing about the country's doom you wouldn't need the asterisk, which kind of admits you are failing to carry your message.

S

I am attempting to convey disgust at partisan politics in Congress without taking sides as Both sides are culpable in this circus...............stan