docmaverick
docmaverick
Sep 03, 2011

Give Me a Break !

Each musician plays their instrument
with fellow prodigies, one can bet;

when the "gig" does finally, get underway
he's not focusing on the music in each set.

What this minstrel quietly contemplates
isn't the forty-five minutes he's, played;

what really stands out in his "first mind"
is what's owed to him, after the music's been made.

You see, out of each, and every hour
fifteen minutes are his own,

he may wish to spend them with his eager public
or else, he can spend them all alone.

Well, that rule should be set as the standard
so, no one gets to grade at all, on the curve;

then, when your enemy becomes your strongest ally
don't let it show, that they're on your last nerve.

For even in a "worse case scenario"
you'll find yourself picking up the "slack",

so, let all of your private moments just add up
unused, maybe you can get them, back!

Kind of like a risky retirement
there'd be only ourselves left to thank,

then maybe we could all check out, early
and still have time to laugh, all the way to.....the bank !

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

docmaverick

...is a, "right on" compliment; soo many poems grab my attention with their title....only to let me down, in the text of the poem. That critique was a real, live "zinger"...even if I DO say so, myself!
Thanx, sincerely;
doc.

M

I like where you went with this one and I felt its muse across the ways.

then, when your enemy becomes your strongest ally
don't let it show, that they're on your last nerve.

For even in a "worse case scenario"
you'll find yourself picking up the "slack",

Alot of slack lately eh?

Let them have it for it does not reflect your slack in this write:)

Bravo Che Bello's