Geezer's Poem (rhyme patterns 1)

Submitted by Geezer

Banging on the gong
Gets her heart to thumping
Before it is too long
Her body starts to jumping

He bangs away all night
She doesn’t mind a bit
Jill thinks that it’s alright
She hopes he doesn’t quit

Jack is really great
He keeps on like a bunny
His timing is first rate
He don’t do nothing funny

He just keeps on the beat
Never falters once
She's potatoes, he’s the meat
Jack’s no bumbling dunce

Now comes the final stroke
Jack and Jill are done
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You can have such fun!

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my rework

upon the gong he bangs as while
her heart goes loudly, thump, thump, thump
her body starts to jump, jump, jump
before too long she starts to smile

Jill thinks that it’s alright to play
She doesn’t mind it slightly rough
She hopes he never gives it up
He bangs away all night and day

His timing, rhythm, both first rate
Jack, well, he’s more than really good
He keeps on like a rabbit would
He don’t do nothing funny, mate

He just keeps on, beat nimbly goes
He never falters even once,
Cos Jack is not a bumbling dunce
He’s the meat to her potatoes

When comes the final broken straw
Our Jack and Jill will do just fine
They both have had a real good time
with coke* there is no need to pour

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